Hi Ben, I'm Cate from Belfast School. Your community writing was really amazing, because you explained why you like Ahipara and I like how you showed a dog saying goodbye. Your post made me think of all the different beaches I've been to and if there were any golf clubs near me. My Nana and Poppa play golf a lot, so I was wondering if they had been there before or if they just stay in their own town. Maybe next-time you do a post with a background picture, think about using a colour that we can see more, because the black with the blue of the sea and the gray of the shadows didn't mix well with the black text. Ka Pai! Happy Blogging, Cate
i like the dog at the end good job.
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ReplyDeleteHi Ben, I'm Cate from Belfast School.
Your community writing was really amazing, because you explained why you like Ahipara and I like how you showed a dog saying goodbye. Your post made me think of all the different beaches I've been to and if there were any golf clubs near me. My Nana and Poppa play golf a lot, so I was wondering if they had been there before or if they just stay in their own town. Maybe next-time you do a post with a background picture, think about using a colour that we can see more, because the black with the blue of the sea and the gray of the shadows didn't mix well with the black text. Ka Pai!
Happy Blogging,
Cate